Comments on: Poetic transformation http://www.magpiedays.com/2008/06/poetic-transformation/ Hoarding the shiny moments. Sun, 07 Mar 2010 20:18:20 -0800 http://wordpress.org/?v=2.8.4 hourly 1 By: sister AE http://www.magpiedays.com/2008/06/poetic-transformation/comment-page-1/#comment-66 sister AE Tue, 17 Jun 2008 05:34:48 +0000 http://www.magpiedays.com/?p=29#comment-66 I like both the free verse and the villanelle, but I must say that I miss the names of the other rivers in the villanelle. I guess that's a reason to keep the free verse version around as well! I like both the free verse and the villanelle, but I must say that I miss the names of the other rivers in the villanelle. I guess that’s a reason to keep the free verse version around as well!

]]> By: durable pigments http://www.magpiedays.com/2008/06/poetic-transformation/comment-page-1/#comment-36 durable pigments Wed, 04 Jun 2008 10:37:29 +0000 http://www.magpiedays.com/?p=29#comment-36 Wow, Jennifer... I love these transformations! Both poems are lovely, and as christine said above, this does seem like a natural transformation for this poem. I agree that the villanelle is not at all sing-songy. It has a very pleasant, gentle rocking rhythm to it and a lot of quiet power. Very nice! Wow, Jennifer… I love these transformations! Both poems are lovely, and as christine said above, this does seem like a natural transformation for this poem. I agree that the villanelle is not at all sing-songy. It has a very pleasant, gentle rocking rhythm to it and a lot of quiet power. Very nice!

]]> By: Crafty Green Poet http://www.magpiedays.com/2008/06/poetic-transformation/comment-page-1/#comment-34 Crafty Green Poet Tue, 03 Jun 2008 08:05:53 +0000 http://www.magpiedays.com/?p=29#comment-34 I like both poems and the choice of villanelle for the rewrite was perfect, as Christine points out too I like both poems and the choice of villanelle for the rewrite was perfect, as Christine points out too

]]> By: christine http://www.magpiedays.com/2008/06/poetic-transformation/comment-page-1/#comment-33 christine Mon, 02 Jun 2008 22:55:02 +0000 http://www.magpiedays.com/?p=29#comment-33 I really like both poems. It seems natural that you would choose the former to put into a vilanelle, considering the refrains. The free verse poem reminds me of a river, with the refrains acting like bends. The villanelle is more like a song, and in that way you capture the original essence of the form, and not sing-songey at all. Nice work! do you think you'll try this kind of revision process again? I really like both poems. It seems natural that you would choose the former to put into a vilanelle, considering the refrains. The free verse poem reminds me of a river, with the refrains acting like bends.

The villanelle is more like a song, and in that way you capture the original essence of the form, and not sing-songey at all. Nice work! do you think you’ll try this kind of revision process again?

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